
by raphshap
10 comments
PhotoDaniels (Stephanie Daniels) added a critique 1 year ago:
tzirlott (Tom Zirlott) added a critique 1 year ago:
Great picture. The candid reaction of the girl is perfect. If you could go back you might consider:
• The girl needs 1/2 more step to place her in a white area
• Change the angle so that the trash can is not a focal point
If you have the software, clean up the dust.
raphshap said 1 year ago:
hey thank you all so much for the feedback. i just thought i'd explain the trash can because a lot of people seem to have qualms with that aspect of the picture. personally, i feel it is a crucial part of the photo, and i framed my shot purposefully so. first of all, on a purely technical basis, i love the way it bisects the dark boards in the center, and the way it itself is bisected, light and dark. i used the trash can, however, symbolically, as it says something about coney island, a truly american area that has fallen into antiquity, become a zone for trash and refuse, the flotsam and jetsam of brooklyn tides. i wanted, in a way, to glorify the trash, to evoke the garbage idolatry i feel every time i visit.
psychodudu (Andrew Parker) added a critique 1 year ago:
OK raphshap, here's my two penneth. Watever your interpretation or intentions are when you take an image, you can be sure it will be interpreted a 100 different other ways than you ever thought of. There are certain "rules" in photography that will lead people to immediately discount your image if it is not quite obviously out of the top drawer, or your name is Henri Cartier-Bresson (then people question their own judgement instead). I like your explanation, but ideally a photograph should not need your definition, it should stand by itself. So basically, I'd adjust the horizon, remove the hair and let it stand. Good job!
raphshap said 1 year ago:
yes i know, and thank you. i certainly have taken all of the criticism into account, i think it is all true and reasonable. i just wanted to voice what it meant to me since i am afforded that luxury in this forum :)

by raphshap
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LadyWings (Kara Brothers) added a critique 1 year ago:
If I hadn't seen that this was in Amusement Parks, I would never have seen the Park in the background. I think the foreground is too busy, with the bike and different fences, which draws attention away from the park.
LadyWings (Kara Brothers) added a critique 1 year ago:
OK, my husband said the ferris wheel was the first thing he saw... I guess different people will see things differently.
tzirlott (Tom Zirlott) added a critique 1 year ago:
I noticed the ferris wheel and the helmet. You may want to back off the print exposure until you get back just a few of the highlights. If that throws off the contrast then stick with this.

by raphshap
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Blumie (Sabine) added a critique 1 year ago:
It has a very sad atmosphere for me. It is like "those days are gone" - maybe since the kids have their playstation today ... But I think you captured that sad story very well, so I still see it as a winner.
raphshap said 1 year ago:
bastian: thanks, this is actually just a scan of a print i developed myself
blumie: it's interesting that you say that, because i'm only just 17 myself, so i guess it's cool i was able to fine such a...mature view point
Blumie (Sabine) added a critique 1 year ago:
Let me tell you - as a 36 year old - sometimes you are with 17 years more adult than others. No matter what happens, thats fine as long as you do not forget how important it is to be childish!
willie_901 (william) added a critique 1 year ago:
Very nice. This photo invokes emotion.
You are developing a style. You have a good eye. Keep it up! Keep shooting/developing/printing.
You should try and clean things up a bit with regard to your developing/film drying technique. The hair/threads and other blemishes have to go. Otherwise, these prints are good. Don't despair. It just takes practice. You may enjoy the following forums where you will find tips from others who develop their own B&W film:
and
Whatever feedback you may receive, don't fret about technical criticism from people who have never touched or looked through a B&W negative.
tzirlott (Tom Zirlott) added a critique 1 year ago:
Nice picture. And nice work. You might want to try dodging the center of the sign ever so lightly but other than a bit of cleaning I wouldn't chage anything else.

by raphshap
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raphshap said 1 year ago:
taken in italy on a disposable camera
paddlepunk (Holger Neu) added a critique 1 year ago:
nice reflections ;)

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I love film grain. I agree with the above, though, cloning out the fuzz and blemishes. The horizon, if it isn't meant to be crooked, would enhance the image if it was straight.I would like to see some of the shadows in the middle lightened a hair, just so the image doesn't seem overall so dark.
I LOVE the b&w!!!
I saw your other images. You have a great eye! Please update your info and keep posting!!!